Wednesday, January 27, 2010

Critique Request-RUDY TOOT-TOOT


WORD COUNT: 16,000 words

GENRE: Children's chapter book (ages 7-10)

DESCRIPTION: Rudy Toot-Toot has a special power, almost like a super hero: he can fart better than anyone in the whole world.  It comes natural when you are born on a bean farm.  His problem is that while he can fart on command, he can't ever hold it in when he needs to...or control the power of a Big One.  After one monstrous emission scares all the customers away from the family Bean Market, it's up to Rudy to find a way to use his special power to lure them back, before the bank takes away their home.

CRITIQUE REQUESTED: What's funny and what's not.  In earlier drafts I tried to avoid being crass, and I ended up avoiding humor as well.  Also looking for comments on the flow and the voice in general.

CONTACT INFO: rjdaley101071 at gmail dot com


  1. This sounds hilarious. I know some boys that would LOVE this. Farts. he he.

  2. Thanks Anita. If you're interested in reading it, I'm in the market for feedback. Especially from the boys...

    My email address is just shoot me a message and I'll reply with the MS in Word format.

  3. I'm a crass person myself - and that usually shocks people I work with when it comes out.

    I've been interested in this story since I first saw it posted at TPQSP. I don't read MG or much YA even, so I doubt I'd be much help to you. The best I could do would be give it to my 11 year old boy and see what he says.

    Good luck.


  4. Hi, Rick,

    I have two boys and a girl who would be really interested in this. I'll send you an email - I'd love to help out reading it.

    I'm currently doing revisions on my women's fiction book. I thought revisions would be the easiest part. Ugh!


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