Showing posts with label Chapter Book. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Chapter Book. Show all posts

Wednesday, January 27, 2010

Critique Request-RUDY TOOT-TOOT

TITLE: RUDY TOOT-TOOT

WORD COUNT: 16,000 words

GENRE: Children's chapter book (ages 7-10)

DESCRIPTION: Rudy Toot-Toot has a special power, almost like a super hero: he can fart better than anyone in the whole world.  It comes natural when you are born on a bean farm.  His problem is that while he can fart on command, he can't ever hold it in when he needs to...or control the power of a Big One.  After one monstrous emission scares all the customers away from the family Bean Market, it's up to Rudy to find a way to use his special power to lure them back, before the bank takes away their home.


CRITIQUE REQUESTED: What's funny and what's not.  In earlier drafts I tried to avoid being crass, and I ended up avoiding humor as well.  Also looking for comments on the flow and the voice in general.

CONTACT INFO: rjdaley101071 at gmail dot com